Rails

Rails

 

 

 

 

Hemingway's pachyderms 

might have colored the hills

barren,

my elephant in the room

is vague gray

 

scattered sorrow the weight

the sun shielded

memories are pack animals

Napoleon's troops

are my tears

over the landscape

 

I miss seeing you through the glass

as the train leaves the station

and the conductor

checks my heart

for verification

that I did pay for a window seat.

 

 

erin--cilberto

2/16/22 

Reviews

[DIVYA]

my elephant in the room
is vague gray .........

I felt the utter sadness in your words. Having loved and lost, coping with pack animal memories and tears like Napoleon's troops is terrible in itself but to love and be doubted yet is sadder still. The heart was poked and prodded here, checked for its veracity. When all it wanted and did was to love. The window seat was fully paid for...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, DIVYA,
j.

[Patricia]

Profoundly weighty but not necessarily dark, I feel the gray while watching the world go by getting closer to that final destination as that elephant takes a free ride on my back, getting heavier everyday. Can’t wait for spring so it at least feels lighter and the world is not as gray as I feel…excellent poem

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Patricia,
j.

[Unspoken poet]

Oh wow, better take care of that elephant in the room! Sad but profoundly done but is intriguing, enjoyable read

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Unspoken,
j.

[M. J. Smith]

Isn't it strange how hearts become houses haunted by old ghosts? People and places that remain only in memory. Voices that echo in an empty chamber. And somehow, age doesn't diminish the pain...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, very strange. Thank you, M.J.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

So sad if your memories have become pack animals. Memories are better if they are like cuddly p***y cats. They should bring comfort, not hound you. You are missing people who were dear to you. Grief can last a long time dear friend. Your heart is suffering. I feel that.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Chris,
j.