a November day

a November day

 

 

grapefruit explodes

a talking throat

stopped in mid-syllable

a bloodied glove

holds what's left of a

brain,

the accent silent

a rose in the back seat

 

a bracelet with part of him

she wears as a symbol

he is still with her

they are still in the limo

he loves her even

as the juice

 

drips into the cup

of surmise

 

his face in her dreams

her skirt in pinkish gratitude

she was holding him

even as life sped up

and out.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/6/22

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

JFK and Jackie. Saw it on a black and white TV screen. Couldn't stop crying when Camelot died. We all need our dreams. Powerful write, evoked such broken emotions. Vivid imagery, excellent write J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

twas an awfully sad day....
thank you, Chris,
j.

[Writergurl]

grapefruit explodes
a talking throat
stopped in mid-syllable
a bloodied glove

Perfect wording, love this. awesome write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, writergurl.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Jack was the favorite of my sisters. I always thought Bobby was the brighter hope. We'll never know what might have been. Sad.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I thought the same...first time I could vote and I was going to vote for Bobby...
was in 8th grade when Jack was shot.
thank you, Fabian,
j.

[Relic]

A powerful one, J. Very powerful. I don't think anyone who heard the news will ever forget it. Just the name Dallas Texas is enough to bring back a chill for some.

The security gaurd that jumped on the back cursed himself the rest of his life for not getting to the car quick enough. A very sad and shocking day.

Geraldo was the first to show the video on late night TV. I'll bet even he is still chilled by that event.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

tough day for all of us, thanks, Relic,
j.

[M. J. Smith]

Oof! Dude! I just stumbled over a gravestone in my mind. Long ago, this was me. Someone I cared deeply about took her own life. And I was left with momentoes and broken dreams. These words hit like a kick in the chest. You certainly know how to invoke a mule.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am sorry to have brought up such a tragic event for you, M.J.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! This was endearing and sad. Powerful phraseology with powerful emotions attached. A story from the news reel perhaps.
All your writes are effective sir Jacob. You never disappoint.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Sami, was a sad day for all of us.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

John and Camelot. It truly was. You are welcome.

[Sami Khalil]

"drips into the cup

of surmise



his face in her dreams

her skirt in pinkish gratitude"

[Sami Khalil]

a bracelet with part of him

"she wears as a symbol

he is still with her

they are still in the limo

he loves her even"

as the juice

[Patricia]

Oh wow, powerful, sad and final. Strong writing with fantastic lines, all gripping

[jacob erin-cilberto]

was a really sad day for the United States...
thank you, Patricia,
j.

[Patricia]

it was. I remember writing my speech final in high school on the event. so much mystery. i just could never get the images out of my head. still can't