Speedos and Irreverence

Speedos and Irreverence 

poems of composure

a rattled rhyme or two

settles down in slant,

then pause

then silent pondering

assonance, but not excessive

consonance but in blunted force

whittled down lines and stanzas

words regrouped

spacing a matter

of mind over

contract to write form

I feel free, suddenly

ridiculed for ranting

I am off the deep end

of a line

it's white

I don't care if I am in violation

I'll test the waters

dip my vowels

into a stagnant pond of mayhem

join a symposium

on writing Real Poetry

fall asleep to the hum drum sound

wake in a dream 

with a really fast typewriter

that thinks faster than I ever could

and hope the poems composed

read--- real good.

erin-cilberto

3/21/22

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This has a cynical edge to it that I don't generally sense in your work; perhaps a bit of stabbing sarcasm in the end. But if you're going to stab sarcasm, that sounds as good a spot as any; maybe a bigger target to boot, speedos and G-strings notwithstanding. I've been to quite a few writer's symposiums where I rub shoulders with "accomplished poets and authors" and listen to their advice on how to become better at what I do. But if Twain was correct in his assertion that we "write what we know" I've yet to figure out how they could better teach me what I already know. So I've settled on pointers as to how to better express it. I sometimes wish I could slow my own mind; at least long enough to write some of these manic thoughts down. So I carry a pen and pad around instead like a sword and shield to battle with my muse. I enjoyed the read. F.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

good weapons, pen and pad...yes, absolutely.
thank you for your kind review,
j.

[Patricia]

I love the first stanza, so much considered in just the opening and where to go from there, well of course you whittle it down and go on a rant and bit of an insane mayhem route and hope it all comes out "real good" love that by the way and yes it came out real good! as only you can do! ok I am moving from envious to jealousy my friend, well only in that you are writing and I am not and wow you're writing is thrilling here!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Patricia,
j.

[Patricia]

you're welcome ;)

[JE Falcon]

Well said, and I must agree. "and hope the poems composed
read--- real good."

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, JE,
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

As writers we can not worry about what others might think about our words.For if we do the typewriter will rub out of ink before we are finished.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think you are right, Cowboy...yes.
thank you,
j.

[Chris]

Chuckling here. Yeah I'm still around.

Watching all the moral(e) imperatives - operatives
...play...
the consonance like shattered masonry
and fractured lives
with no "wayback" machine to reDO
where even the "roaches" feared to tread.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your poetic reply...now you have me chuckling.

good to see you again, Chris,
j.

[Cherrie]

Amen brother- I agree.
We should test the waters.
When did poets become so uncreative.
If we are only plugging in words. Then , download an application. Create a sonnet by typing 10 words and let the formatted program spit one out.
Balance and form is only one outcome not the measure.
If we can't feel the magic how can anyone else. Most importantly keep the pen (keyboard) moving.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and then watch out the spit doesn't hit us!!!!!!!! :)))))

thanks for your understanding words, Cherrie,
j.

[Cherrie]

Just keep the wind at your back. That'll show'm. :)

[Lathen Griffiths]

A real joy to read Jacob: “dip my vowels
into a stagnant pond of mayhem”, excellent,
great title also,

Lathen

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lathen,
j.

[knighngale]

hello, Cilberto, I love it, because it's a journey, and I love the sound of typewriters, I fall in glee, :D

[jacob erin-cilberto]

like the sound of my students doing an in=class writing...the sound of those keys being hit...very cool.
thank you, knighngale,
j.

[knighngale]

very welcome Cilberto, Yeah! :D cheewuwu

[Miss Sharon]

I just love this Jacob! Your creative genus never ceases to amaze me my friend. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think it is more, creative luck...but thank you, Sharon,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Oh, this poem is real goid. The metaphors amazing. The lines rattle along with undeniable attitude. Great title J. Your today poems excel. Your muse is manic :)

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Chris,
j.