it's that color

it's that color

 

 

blue entry

not the pretty sky kind

but the other-side- of- together kind

 

the empty sky kind

with clouds that pine

to let loose

but hold back

 

trying to hide from the sun's

womb,

infant hurt

grows to adolescence

old age

 

same color sky

not deep azure

but pure sorrow

 

that blue

the one inferring

tears would have been welcome

 

and then there may have been

a clearing

one we might purview

with smiling heart.

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/4/2022

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

Yes the deepest of blues are hard to swim out of especially when you’re sinking.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew,
j.

[Miss Sharon]

I hear you my friend...and unfortunately I too know how this feels. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, dear Sharon,
I appreciate your understanding.
j.

[William Michael Reeves]

I like the way you went from deep azure to sorrow to blue. It feels like your poetry is gradually shifting. Dunes of words drifting in and out of the current of form...piled against the rhyme.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Bill,
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like your "Dunes" allusion...good start for a poem that might be piled against the rhyme.
j.

[William Michael Reeves]

Compiled words at war with rhyme. Metaphoric missles aimed at reason.
Mind mines mining meaning.

What would Frank Herbert think? I just remembered a series of books he wrote with a poet.

[William Michael Reeves]

Yeah! One of the characters sang a lot and each chapter started with a poem if I remember right. Ascension Factor, Lazarus Effect and Jesus Incident.

[Earthrise]

I remember when I first realized I had gone numb. I thought it was progress compared to the emotional turmoil I had once gone through. This perfectly describes what it's actually like. Even though I can relate to this, I'm still sorry that you know what it's like.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Earthrise,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Emotional scars are difficult to heal, but we can come to terms with them. When the sky feels your pain, there is no where to hide. Feeling blue is sometimes a good thing....after all, it inspired this poem! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, sometimes.
thank you, Lydi,
j.

[Patricia]

I was feeling it all the way to the last stanza and you had to bring in hope. ;) I don’t know, I’m not feeling the hope. But I loved this, every line of it, so original and appropriate for the times

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Patricia,
j.

[Carola]

your poems often seem a bit esoteric & elusive in meaning to me. but i enjoyed your description in the 2nd stanza.
cheerio carola

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Carola,
glad you could find something to your liking,
j.

[Carola]

i do read your poems, but as i said in my profile if i don't understand it, then i don't comment, my apologies jacob.
as you can see from my poems they are pretty straight forward narrative style, any poetic style that leans towards free verse, my mind just doesn't get it. :-(

[Patricia Wedel]

A lovely heart-felt Poem.. by an Artist that paints Sorrow. My father was a religious fanatic and slapped my legs if I moved to Music. It takes a Life-time to Dance with pleasure. gently, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it does, Pat, yes it does,
shame on him for slapping your legs...as it says in the Bible, there is a time to dance.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

I feel a blue mood here J. Some infant hurts never go away. I feel here, that what once caused tears, no longer does. A quiet acceptance, maybe forgiveness. Somethings you don:t forget, but you can forgive. I was a very sensitive child too. A raised voice, a cross word. I wore them like a arm band.

the sun's womb, that is fab, I was going to say cool:)

Felt these words, yes I did.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your understanding words, Chris,
j.

[John the Baptist]

"infant hurt/grows to adolescence/old age." It's true. Wounds incurred in childhood can linger for the lifespan, even if consciously forgotten. The tears mentioned seem to indicate a recognition of them, along with a reconciliation. Sadly, not all achieve this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John,
j.