Blind

Blind

it's a long morning

from the alarm clock's dawning

the night before

redundant last call

the last sip, a token slip

of tongue

a hand retracts

lips invert

a casual flirt

finds a pillowed companion

and when the sun rises and spies

uncoupled heart

sleeps alone

under a blanket of its own lies.

erin-cilberto

4/7/22

Reviews

[Desert Knave]

This leaves so very much to the imagination of the reader, which is what makes it so enjoyable to read. Very nicely done. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Jim,
j.

[John the Baptist]

One night stands can release some tension, but they don't do anything for loneliness.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John,
j.

[Lathen Griffiths]

This left me with a feeling of the cold light of day, poignant Jacob.

Lathen

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lathen,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

What happens at night can be very slippery, but we are sometimes blinded by what state we are in; a tryst gone awry…next morning says it all; and this happens too often….reality sinks in….
Best
B.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Betty, appreciate your words...
and am enjoying Cool Joe's Redemption...
I like the tone of the narrative so far...
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re welcome J and I can’t thank you enough for reading my first novel! So appreciated.
Best, B.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

The last stand of one night stands and goodbye notes left on the nightstand. They say love is blind. But even some of the lust is obviously whiskey vision impaired. I enjoyed this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Fabian...damn that whiskey.
j.

[JE Falcon]

This was a smooth but sad rendering. --- I wonder, was it any port in a storm, or the thought of a safe harbor that wasn't there?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your review, JE,
j.

[DIVYA]

Nights have a way of leading astray. The morning let's the truth dawn. The lying heart suffers the consequences. It is so sad.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

don't you just hate those mornings...best kept secrets exposed?
thank you, DIVYA,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

That uncoupled heart tells a sad story here J. I felt an ache here in the morning light. Reality at dawn.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chris,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

A poignant Poem embroidered on a Pillow... where reality is hiding behind the Moon. gently, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I always love your replies...thanks, Pat,
j.