tapping my water glass

tapping my water glass

 

 

sitting in the middle of a bleak cafe

the aroma of ugly soup

boring cold cuts

salad with wilted personality

 

I am eating crow

my girlfriend left hours ago

even before the menus arrived

I must have said something

 

maybe I will ask for a second helping.

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/10/22

Reviews

[Gee]

This brings to mind couples sitting across from each other eating, no words exchanged, between course the silence lit by iPhone screens, tis sad to see.
I guess both the girlfriend and the boyfriend left these relationships years ago.
Never tried crow but have slept with some unsavoury birds !
Morning Jacob, hope all is well in Biden world.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nothing is fine here...but that's life.
thanks for your review....you are one of the kindest, most supportive individuals on this site, Gee.
j.

[Gee]

Hi Jacob, what a lovely thing to say, I'm touched.
It costs nowt to be pleasant and even mannered though you wouldn't guess it the way many go on :)
Have a great day/weekend, take care.

[Chris Shaw]

'I am eating crow', that one brilliant line sums up the situation here. Yes it is both sad and bleak. Love the title. I could visualise this scene so very well J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chris,
j.

[Beccy]

We have to live with our regrets I suppose; though often I return to the moment I was in just before I find myself alone in the middle of that 'bleak cafe.'

You have such a clever mind jacob.

Beccy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate that comment more than you can know, Beccy...because I feel that my mind is getting rather old...and losing some speed.
j.

[John the Baptist]

As I recall, crow has a bitter taste the first and successive times. Forget that second helping; the leftovers are even worse.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

leftover crow...freezer or just the fridge?
thank you, John,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

This really sums up the mood What do I do next? Cos that didn't go to plan. Dry and witty. I like it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew,
j.

[Soren]

A great use of a realistic setting with plays on words leaving a humorous atmosphere. Several lines such as salad with wilted personality, and eating crow worked well in the setting. It leaves a feeling of an unsettled nature as it should. Well done

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Soren,
j.

[NoPoetry]

love the descriptions of the soup!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you,
j.

[Lathen Griffiths]

Fantastic, I love this :) I don’t know sometimes am I meant to find your work funny, (I do because you’re full of wit) but your writing is also ladened with sadness, cleverness and irony in equal measures. Ten or so lines that set a mood a scene and a scenario,

Wonderful writing

Lathe

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, there has to be humor or we would all die of seriousness.
thank you, Lathen,
j.

[Lathen Griffiths]

No worries j.

Lathen.

[JE Falcon]

"I am eating crow
my girlfriend left hours ago
even before the menus arrived
I must have said something"
Bleak cafes are the perfect places to ponder what kinds of crow. ... Or better yet, bleak cafes are the perfect setting for that mystery novel you have been meaning to write. :)



maybe I will ask for a second helping.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, JE,
j.