a flash of gold

a flash of gold

 

 

 

 

A small

                 cold pond

 

itchy fingers and toes crawl

 

into another dimension

 

fear rises from the murky depths

 

a fear of love represents

 

the koi rose to the surface....

 

looked on

 

i?

 

relegated to watch

 

from a shore

 

 

                              of   

 

 

 

distant

 

 

                                feeling.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/20/22

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

The Golden Age of Poetry... you have the Key to longevity... Beware the Mermaid below.. She will steal your Heart and then your "flash of Gold"... if the ending be told in the Deep Sleep. Amen... Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a deep sea sleep might not be a bad way to go.
thank you, Pat,
j.

[knighngale]

oh wow, great imagery hon, loved every moment of it.
The lake, so grand, and bare toes,
very morbid,
---Maynard

[jacob erin-cilberto]

right up your alley, Maynard.
thanks,
j.

[knighngale]

of course, honey, 😋

[redd Brick Keshner]

The koi is coy! In our wanderings, amongst them Japanese ponds in Japanese gardens... the pace and the ambience suits the mood, but then again then texture of murkiness and algae and such serves to provide a distance as well. A wonderfully textured image poem! Thanks for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Fredrick,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Old age made me wander to place, that can't be found no-more Jacob. I liked how you made the reader think and look for things. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome, Jacob.

[Chris Shaw]

Being on the shore of distant feeling is an unpleasant place to be. If you fear love and are afraid to love there is a whole lot missing in life. I found this poem to be a sad one J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

someday I will tell you what inspired this....you will have a good chuckle.
thanks,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

You either dive in or weigh up the pros and cons which brings hesitancy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew,
j.

[AMMD]

Fear is a bit like itchy fingers I suppose. No good or fun. Enjoyed the playful perspective of this piece though

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, AMMD,
j.

[Cherrie]

Fear leads so many. What a overwhelming place to be. Where only the koi rose🌹sees. Haunting and sad.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Cherrie,
j.