poems in alternate dimension

poems in alternate dimension

perhaps i should write

about butterflies

and butter pies

and random hearts aflutter

with nutter an absolute intention

rather than of broken down, condemned

relationships,

suicides in dark corners of wretched minds

casualties of war and sin

and the atrocities therein

perhaps i should write

of new beginnings

saying goodbye to bad endings

of flights of fancy

and eternal flames

not names on the register

of a hotel of hard knocks

windows with spider cracks

a web of covert deceit

of protests on avenues

splattered with blood

casualities of war and sin

perhaps i should write 

of kisses sweet

of love discreet

not of detainment

or arraignment

of lust for flowery description

not intricate deception

perhaps  i should write of you

when the stars were right

and we were beacons

of love in naive

perception

who has to know any better?

erin-cilberto

4/25/22

Reviews

[DIVYA]

A poet is bound to gravitate to the darker side. I believe darkness to a certain extent adds depth to words. I loved all your suggestions here. There is so much promise here.

not names on the register
of a hotel of hard knocks
windows with spider cracks

These lines blew me away!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I don't know, DIVYA....it still puzzles me in 41 years of writing poetry why it is so hard to write happy poems, and seems so easy to write of pain.
thank you,
j.

[Gee]

I must come across as one of the most miserable writers here:)
Apologies for interrupting

[Betty Hermelee]

The fact that you mention all these atrocities that you might or should write about only makes me think that they are disturbing to you; and you are asking yourself if these are worth writing about; or should you just write about sweet kisses..."a lust for flowery description"..I think you are questioning yourself and perhaps coming to the conclusion that you should write about simple love when you were naive; nobody will even know about the other notions. Whew, this is packed with a lot of heart-wrenching stuff... but as always you craft it so well J.
Best, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your astute and very kind review, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome J

[Ana B.]

Reading this writing is like listening to a beautiful piano piece - is pulls the heartstrings and makes one feel and question truths. Perhaps it matters not about what we write, it matter that we write....Beautiful piece my friend, some food for soul, this one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ana,
j.