Rote for the Script

Rote for the Script

 

 

 

blaise mood

lovers leaping over the moon of my mind

friends foraging ashes in Phoenix memory

 

listen to the music of my letters

I wrote them dancing

on a stamp

 

there are thoughts of so many

postmarks, 

 

water marks

dripping with envy

 

you moved on to another stage

and left me the understudy

 

to wallow in my own shallow lines

I remember faces,

all of you,

 

but the script went blank

and I can no longer recite 

any of you.

 

 

 

4/23/22

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Especially loved the last verse! Jacob
Beautiful poem
Full of wet rained on memories and sticky Stamps
I’m sure you recall the scripts

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Julie,
j.

[knighngale]

aww this is a great one, Cilberto! I love it! 😁😋😎😍🥱
the note, the indifference, the stamp,
an idle love uncertain and forgotten,
great read, love, great great read! :D (Maynard)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes those stamps are so little...thank you, knighngale,
j.

[knighngale]

hahaha, your funny Cilberto, :D (((((huggie power))))

[Patricia Wedel]

Many Angles in Geometry..
before we reach a Conclusion.
London Bridge is falling down.
Sipping Rope is a Learning process.
Be safe and well. gently, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it's been falling down for all my life...do you think it will ever be completely gone?
thank you, Pat,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

The tone and mood change in this write from the lovers leaping over the moon of your mind. I get the start of a relationship and it's promise to its sad demise and the aftertaste. That doesn't go, that bloomin aftertaste has a habit of lingering.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Chris,
j.

[keith]

here are some 'things' that haunt for a lifetime

good write good read

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Keith....

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

WOW....remembering faces...and sometimes not even remembering where you knew them from or at what stage of life. The image of lovers leaping over the moon brought a lovely innocence to this one, Jacob. I was thinking of the nursery rhyme, "hey diddle diddle". Then there was a bit of regret....and always, always, an enjoyable read. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Lydi,
j.

[Lisasview]

Oh my goodness another poem of yours I relate to.
I love the way you use your metaphors and I went back to reread your poem several times to uncover and explore more possible meanings..
The use of words..stamps, understudy, blank, dripping, envy, etc...are wonderful.
I could go on and on...
I will end this review by saying I love this poem...
Lisa, now in Spain

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are most kind, Lisa...most kind.
j.

[Lisasview]

Just honest with my feelings...