spill

spill

 

 

 

i accept your proposal

certain facts not withstanding

but sitting lazily arranged

those letters of an outcast alphabet

 

doodling on a notepad

ink splashes an emotion

on the edge of a universe

that spans across my mind's galaxy

 

a short moon

like a little candle

for a breath of flame

i put syllables together that are strangers

 

and now they just fight inside me

like a belligerent cancer

the temperature is rising and

i probably signed away my life.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/24/22

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Third stanza is so relatable. We accept the proposal, we don't always get what we want. We don't always like what we write.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

but if we try sometime, we just might find, we get what we need....thank you, Chris.

and thank you Jagger and Richards..

[knighngale]

aww, Cilberto, I feel for ya,
Another note, a splash of ink
I love every single imagery,
the proposal, and nothwistanding great read, hon, 😁😂😋😎😍🥱

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, knighngale,
j.

[knighngale]

your welcome dear

[Patricia Wedel]

To those who much is given ... much is expected.
Together... we can make a difference. truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I hope we can...
thank you, Pat,
j.

[Patricia]

Well done! Know the feeling! The last stanza… five stars!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Patricia,
j.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

The second stanza was golden, with good imagery and connotation. I like the title, spill is just a good poetic word in general. nice poem tyfs

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cyprian,
j.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Beautifully written and well described, Jacob.
I can sense a situation when the writer is about to burst into writing dancing lines of an endless combination of letters. When the ink is about to be used till dried. That moment an endless inscription.

I pray for strength.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really like where you took this...thank you, Kay,
j.