the core, then the encore

the core, then the encore

it's all about the words,

the poet just gives them a shove

towards the foreground...

they perform

like weeping willows burning in the sun

callous in the cold winds

they rise from the mind of crazy

the audience extends to meet them

halfway,

and there is a magic melding

understanding is worth the price of admission

and hopefully,

an afterthought or two

while the lighters flicker

for more.

erin-cilberto

5/14/22

Reviews

[Louisa Chan]

Love your title Jacob. That's really catchy and wise!
Sure this one gives me "an afterthought" and want to read more from you.
I really like the last line "while the lighters flicker for more".
I enjoy the whole piece symobolised by a (musical?) performance. I can imagine the concert curtains opening at the beginning and closing at the end. I thought I read "weeping cellos" : ) Very interesting.
Louisa

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Louisa,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Beautiful poem J.

Understanding is worth the price of admission

We do expose so much of our inner selves for our art and I still hold back afraid to say more.

Last three lines of stanza 1 are superb.

We can all hope for the after thought. That is a reward indeed. That has to be the bonus if a poem is remembered.

A cracking good title too. Loving your yesterday poems J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much Chris....funny, sometimes I do feel that just parts of my poems are worth saving.
you are kind in your reviews,
j.

[Gee]

It is the understanding I struggle with when writing doesn't slap me in the mush and say "this is my meaning fool" ( that sounds a bit like the big fella, BA, from the A Team)
It is what we all want when posting, our words to be read, understood and even pondered upon.
Good stuff Mr J
Hope you are well sir :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate you, Gee. Thank you for your words,
j.

[Miss Sharon]

(it's all about the words, the poet just gives them a shove towards the foreground...they perform
like weeping willows burning in the sun) What an awesome "hook" in your opening stanza Jacob! I love the entire post. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for your kind review, Sharon.
j.

[JE Falcon]

"understanding is worth the price of admission" --- Wow, love this!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, JE,
j.