the rhymefest i detest

the rhymefest i detest

a certain variance

assumes its stance

when love is of an enamored species

ripe with assorted blends

and to the ends

of specification

and classification

exceeds in its releases

a travesty of ends

it most decidedly portends.

erin-cilberto

5/19/22

Reviews

[lifejunkie]

I adore this. It takes soooo much effort for me to rhyme, unless I use RhymeZone, and that feels like anathema to me to do!! So many pretty poems are only that, nice like pieces of fluff that would fit well on a Hallmark Greeting Card but are so devoid of feeling!

I read a review today where it was like the reviewer was a spell & grammar checker, pointing out the poet's errors in both with naught a single word about the message, about the *feeling* in invoked in them. It reminded me of the last scene from "Dead Poet's Society" and made me want to cry for the reviewer that apparently this poet's words couldn't read far enough inside the reviewer to make that feel anything. How sad!!

I love my rhymey meter-fitting poems that are "just so", when I can keep the emotion fresh and vital while staying true to the craft, but to have an exquisitely-crafted poem that loses the feeling I'm trying to convey vs. a long and rambling mess that still feels "alive" (and I have a 54 page poem which is just that at its worse and its best, lol), I would 100% always choose the latter. That your title itself rhymes I just laughed at, brilliant!! And the rest as well, that love is maybe always a travesty in that it always eventually ends no matter how sweet and pure the love when one of the lovers expires.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Some, unfortunately, just like to hear themselves critique...the more the merrier.
I say, Less is More.
and the content is quite important.
I will say that if a poem has many grammatical errors, it needs to be reworked because poetry is our language and we need to respect it and ourselves.
thanks so much for your lively review here.
j.

[lightsong]

Oh! that was really smart! breakups and fake love! to expect at first beauty and harmony, love and tenderness... then comes an ugly end that a poet wouldn't even thought of. This what I read through your words :>

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really like where you took this...thank you, lightsong...
I am not really against rhyme, but feel I botch it pretty badly when I use it.
thank you,
j.

[lightsong]

So now we are TWO lol... You already know I don't write structured poetry and I think I am terrible at it, it is better to leave it to the professionals and Masters :>