at the scene

at the scene

 

 

sentimentality is a cruel pen

bleeding blue

upon fields of white chalked outlines

of hearts

that courageously endeavored

in the name 

of love.

 

no sides,

just love.

 

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/8/22

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

"courageously endeavored
in the name
of love.

no sides,
just love."

I love these lines so much! The ending two lines are especially powerful for me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Momz....
j.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome

[red93]

Excellent Work - I like very much the Colour contrasts and the pared down nature of this piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, red93,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

You really know how to Paint Words Blue…
Thank Goodness you also have a Great Sense of Humor…. Hugs, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I have always laughed, it has kept me alive.
thank you, Pat,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

I saw the outline of white hearts in much the way you see the outline of corpses where there has been a crime scene. Each heart represented a love affair that didn't last. Really creative poetry here J which impacts the reader. I felt much sadness here.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Chris,
j.

[redzone]

but Jacob, isn't 'love' a sentiment??? though chalked outlines evoke more sadness, even frustration and distain, but these too are sentiments... perhaps the someone who caused these fields of chalk outlines, must have great hatred.... also a sentiment.... and in all of these 'sentiments' isn't it impossible to have "no sides"??? except where both sides are guilty in creating this horror.... as I read your poem Jacob it wasn't blue I saw flowing from the pen, but red and way too much of it shed....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

spot on, Curt....thank you for your words,
j.