resisted residence

resisted residence

expansion,

let's add on 

another wing to our

relationship

fly, more in love

feather our understanding

in airy flight

opposing to supposing

there are still clouds

to emaciate

tears to dry

we can fly

given one more take off

we might take from

what grounded us

molt those old causes

find relevancy in a disheveled

nest,

that is not damaged beyond repair

is not condemned but could find

refurbished sentiment

a fresh coat of passion

stay

i have repapered my walls

if you could break down yours

we could add on

another wing to our

relationship

and keep the house.

erin-cilberto

6/16/22 

Reviews

[CD Campbell]

I wonder how much you would get to have someone burn the old house down and get the insurance money from it? Just a thought. Buy a new home with bigger windows. LOL. Kidding. Love the metaphors as always. You make it seem effortless. Enjoyed this!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, CD,
j.

[gram linski]

hey J I do love your lyrical poetic mind and the way you immerse the reader without giving too much away haha, another gem,

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, gram, for your kind words,
j..

[Temperance]

It takes two to save a relationship. Clever metaphor for this relationship. One person can make all the changes they want but, if the other person isn’t interested, there’s nothing to save. Great write as always. T

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Temperance,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Well never say never says I. What's more somethings work out better second time round. It has been known for people to remarry their ex spouse:)) Just a bit of breaking walls down. It can be done J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris...appreciate your philosophy,
j.

[redzone]

love the house metaphor Jacob.... the world changes, we change and the relationship we have with the one we love also changes or we find ourselves homeless or living in a crumbling house.... too often, we fail in a relationship because we are either unable to change or refuse to change and so a new addition or wallpaper does not help.... as the old saying goes, a fresh coat of paint on and outhouse still makes it an outhouse....

here's hoping the house was saved and livable Jacob after the renovations.....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I have lived in too many of those outhouses...and the wallpaper was awful...
thanks, Curt,read moreI have lived in too many of those outhouses...and the wallpaper was awful...
thanks, Curt,
j.

[John the Baptist]

Like the fellow said, hope springs eternal. Has the sound of one desirous of resurrecting something that had previously died, believing the old snags can be ironed out to allow new vistas to open. May it be so. Sometimes things can be better the second time around.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John,
j.

[Ayesha]

Wow. This reads like a sequel to one of my poems, TRUE-BLUE.
"Newly weds,
lately they wonder
who faded away all the fun
what caused the disunion?"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ayesha,
j.

[Earthrise]

I get from this a strong feeling of letting the right person redefine your sense of completion. One of the most striking lines to me describes letting this person "molt those old causes". A lot of people, myself included, have found great meaning, and even personal fulfillment, in causes. To some, they even seem like the most important elements of life. To have your own personal meaning pale in comparison to the meaning offered by a relationship... it's a nice thought. Beautiful piece as always.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your review, Earthrise,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Add on another Wing to our relationship… and keep the House… my Favorite. Reminds me of the Movie with Cary Grant .. Mr. Blandings Dream House”…. So Romantic. gently, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like any movie with Myrna Loy...and it is a travesty that she was never even nominated for an Oscar.
thank you for your words, Pat...
and yes, Cary was always fun as well, and no Oscar for him ever.
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob… Cary Grant was and is The Oscar.. and Myrna Loy is The Golden Star…
Some Artists live on in our Memory. Always, Pat

[Patricia]

Excellent! This poem would make me want to try again if one wrote it to me, if only it was that easy everyone would be a poet, wouldn’t that be nice? You make it look easy and I know it’s not :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Patricia,
j.