totaled

totaled

 

 

 

bits of bits of bits

of reminders

of remainders

 

of a quotient

unidentified in spatial realm

I knew you once

could figure out the equation

 

but the divider came

the product

of issues multiplied

a bevy of numbers that refused 

to come out even

 

remainders

that were reminders

of my bad math

when it came to love.

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/24/22

Reviews

[W. Barrett Munn]

And sometimes the words arrange themselves just right and we’re wise enough not to screw with them. Congratulations wise one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I don't mess with them much, Winston...thank you,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

We are never equal and as much as we try to be even we end up at odds with each other. And how it all adds up in the end.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew,
j.

[JE Falcon]

"a bevy of numbers that refused
to come out even
remainders
that were reminders
of my bad math
when it came to love."
Oh, my goodness, isn't that the truth!
There is not enough words to describe the many ways I loved this poem, thanks.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, JE,
j.

[Richard Knox]

This is a wonderful metaphorical image of a failed relationship and our ineptness in navigating the many dimensions and complexities of love. Your poetry is at once personal and universal.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Many complexities...too many.
thanks, Richard,
j.

[Light and ashes]

"but the divider came

the product

of issues multiplied

a bevy of numbers that refused

to come out even



remainders

that were reminders

of my bad math

when it came to love,"

f*cking amazing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, light.
j.

[Light and ashes]

You are very welcome, jacob.

[red93]

Maths was never my strong point either JE-C - you had to have Maths O Level for University entrance and it took me 3 goes to pass the darned O Level. Very good this piece and a nicely sustained metaphor.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, red93....I am learning after 50 plus years to sustain...
j.

[Fran Marie]

Nice metaphors throughout
your lines, I'd say this adds up
to being a cleverly penned poem

Well done

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Fran,
hope you are well,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Through all the maths, all I could see dear J was a car crash. Having said that I was never any good at maths. You are so clever with your metaphors. Excellent title.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am a car crash...thank you, Chris...always putting up with my metaphors.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

You are not a car crash, you are a poet and and an exceptionally good one :)

[Temperance]

Some say that everything can be broken down to a mathematical equation....even love? Maybe that's our problem with love....trying to break it down to make sense to us instead of just taking it as it comes and not question it. No adding, subtracting, dividing, etc. Just be at one with it. Interesting poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and i squared equals negative one.
oops. thank you for your insights.
j.

[Temperance]

Lol. You are welcome.

[Ranger Kessel]

I loved the bad bath line. I can so relate to that. Thanks Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you Ranger,
j.