in your stirrups

in your stirrups

 

 

 

saddle sore blues

a long ride to nowhere good

I loved you on the trail

and trailing

 

getting further behind

your heart with

each beat of the prancing feet

of my poem

 

I pull into the stable

with unstable emotions

galloping even as I 

stand firm

 

inert eyes

fixated deeply on nothing

and that old country song blazing

on the transistor

 

God, I hate country music today.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/16/22

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Love the mixed metaphor and double entendre. "into the stable
with unstable emotions" Do you really hate country music are are you just horsing around? ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like some of it...but I am a rocker since that is what I grew up with...I was 5 when Rock started and I had 45's from the earliest days.
the old country, ugh for me...but some of the newer country I like because it reminds me of Rockabilly.
thank you, Fabian,
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Yeah, I like rockabilly too. Elvis was once shouted offstage by a crowd yelling, Johnny, Johnny for Johnny Cash.

[Patricia Wedel]

Dear Jacob... I think of the song, Bo Jangles... The first time I went Riding we had a Guide who was a singer also... and his horse rode in a Gallop and so did mine... and my Saddle fell off and saved the day for me in more ways than one. I appreciate your Candor. gently, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

And you did not get hurt?

I have fallen off a horse and landed on my head...probably hurt the ground more than me. But then the horse was going to charge me...another rider swooped in and got me out of the situation. Thank you for your words...do you appreciate my candor or my canter? :)))
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Canter … it would have been Best if my Father had taught me to Speak Hungarian.. but then Heaven only knows if they have Rhyming Poetry in Hungarian.. it would be Hilarious… I ❤️ love being Foolish.. Pat

[W. Barrett Munn]

That's a nice bit of disjunction in the last line. A deceptive and excellent way to gently close the door on this write. Well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Winston,
j.

[Stuart Munro]

Really good poem .i rode a horse once , went overhead and onto the ground , aged twelve , my first lesson
I cancelled the second lesson lol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Oh, no, you too?
I was about 14 when that happened to me...
I sat on the ground in a daze and then saw the horse was getting ready to come at me....my sister quickly came by on her horse and had me get on...
then she made me get on another horse...perhaps wise, or I would never have ridden again...perhaps I should have learned that with love.
thank you for sharing and for the smile, Stuart.
j.

[Stuart Munro]

Hi Jacob , A similar experience ,except you were lucky enough to have a sister , I love horses
read moreHi Jacob , A similar experience ,except you were lucky enough to have a sister , I love horses
But riding them , no thanks lol, have a great week , thanks for sharing your story ,

[Chris Shaw]

Somehow I think this dame took you for a ride to nowhere dear J. When I thought of country, John Denver came to mind. Annie's song. I think he penned beautiful lyrics. You love like he sings. So from the heart.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Annie's song is so beautiful.
thank you, Chris,
j.

[Weeping willow]

HA!HA! wonderful write, use to hate the old country music where they sing of the pain of life. All it did was depress me. Good flow ;-}

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yep, on hating the old country music...thank you, willow....
j.