a relevant closeness

a relevant closeness

 

 

binging on blue sky

azure cocktail

drunk on fall's foliage

i will happily pass out

within the leaves

of the leaving

 

because that is 

what the turning

expects

of us.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/25/22

Reviews

[Laz K.]

"azure cocktail," the leaves/of the leaving" - such great phrases!
This poem reminds me of Diane Ackerman's essay titled "Why Leaves Turn Color." Both your poem and the essay give voice to the breathless excitement over gettig "drunk on fall's foilage," and they both do it very well.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Laz,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

The time clock and the feeling here of watching it all go by, in fall, which I know is your favourite season and possibly has you in a mood of reflection. Very nice, calming and imagery laden too J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chris,
j.

[Katrina Mckeown]

I love this little poem delicately penned of time passing by.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Katrina,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob… you are the Bees knees…. Indeed… Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Pat,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

A lovely poem I liked the feeling of watching time pass while quenching one’s thirst/thoughts.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew,
j.

[Ken e Bujold]

Cocktail hour's come early for you Jacob. Leaves here still off primping in the bathroom for their big finale.

Like the minimalist approach of the poem.
looking forward to more

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Primping leaves...I like that.
thanks, Ken,
j.

[Ken e Bujold]

your welcome. and if you beat me to using it somehow, good on you

[W. Barrett Munn]

Sometimes the simplest is the most successful and this one exemplifies that truism. A lovely work, Jacob. If you want some primo azure drink in some Sante Fe. You will not be disappointed.
Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thanks for the tip for getting tipsy, Winston,
j.