disassociation

disassociation

 

 

 

spoke in wine song

a sip of serene verse

mellow metaphor

approaching balance

but not quite,

 

tip the bottle once more

and conjugate poetic verbs

to test

congruence

to verify having loved that hard

 

a past lies at the bottom of the bottle

a future is corked, unwilling to spill

insensitive to the slurring

we recite

incite

 

stopping insistently

with too many periods

short lines are 

much

easier

to 

remember 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/31/22

Reviews

[Writergurl]

Wow! This is so good,tip the bottle once more

"and conjugate poetic verbs
to test
congruence
to verify having loved that hard"

I just loved this part so much, amazing write here. I found this Beautiful

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, writergurl,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Easy to remember... the love in your eyes... the Blue of a Robin egg ...
the smell a Rose. a Caterpillar emerges as a Butterfly... all is well until
the next Storm.... Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Pat,
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Hangovers, do overs, recites, rewrites and incoherent babbling, all from a half-empty bottle. There ain't no future in a bottle and you can't drown the past. I saw someone put a ship in one once but it never sailed anywhere. Maybe they might be good for putting a note in if you're stranded on a desert island but you'd be forced to pour out the contents first. "If I only had a dollar for every song I've sung, for every time I had to play while people sat there, drunk..." Creedence from Lodi

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, those ships don't sail do they?
Ah, Lodi..B side of Bad Moon Rising...and a better song than that one...one of their best..
"Oh Lord, I'm stuck in Lodi again"
j.

[Light and ashes]

but more often then not they arent as potent..you write so beautifully, jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the kind words, light,
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I have spoken in fluent wine-song myself, along with beer-song, bourbon-song, vodka-song, but I've totally forgotten every word of tequila-song and the night I learned it.
Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha...thank you, Winston,
j.