Snow White

Snow White

 

 

 

a shady kind of elegance

grace in dark abode

heart flickers

like a inept candle

 

races in step

with certain aloof

pace

the touch, frost

 

love only a tepid shadow

from past Oaks that were 

not strong enough

she needed stability

 

but found no temperance

autumn rushed in 

stripped her bare

of what tenders

 

there were,

in the coldest winter yet

she is as frozen

as the lake which welcomed her.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/24/22

Reviews

[duff]

The bones are stripped bare striving for purpose. Enjoyed it Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, duff,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

I think of Snow White born to Care for others… and finding the Purpose of Life and Love.. is understanding and appreciating the Light of Giving. gently, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, thank you, Pat...pretty much spot on.
j.

[softlyfall]

Please forgive my confusion but this brings to mind Persephone more than Snow White. (Or perhaps i am being too literal, I usually am. My psychiatrist says i have black and white magical thinking like a child but i refuse to grow up)
I don't even understand inept candle, jacob... isn't a flame supposed to flicker?
But-
if you speak of a woman who runs from a cold, aloof mother and finds no other solace than death like sleep- yes, snow white
But you forgot the prince and the happy ending!
Please forgive me for my confusion. I feel dense.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Nope, no density....the flickering dying...like the heart, and Yes to the woman who runs from the cold...but runs from love with frozen heart...all ingredients...Snow White is more an allusion to the woman, not necessarily the disney character.
Thank you for your insights, Amy...quite accurate actually. But then, any interpretation gotten by the reader belongs to that reader ...
j.
j.

[softlyfall]

Thank you, Jacob, I was on the right track, just thinking too Disney. (surprising nobody who knows me)
I can see the candle flame now- there is a difference between the dance of flame and the flicker of a dying flame. I actually love that nuance

[Toni.S]

Wow, the true mood of Snow White. The feeling of being stripped bare, and then fighting back for a little peace of mind. Very Nice.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Toni,
j.