Rings

Rings

 

 

as our lips met

your greeting was a trillion miles away

your eyes said nothing

the kiss

was some interplanetary imagining

then I landed back on earth

 

feeling I'd never left the ground

and Saturn had disappeared from the sky.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/2/23

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

The impression is the lady is giving a message by doing nothing. Her mind is obviously somewhere else, possibly with someone else. Stay on earth; Saturn is nothing but gases, anyway.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is true....I will tell her that.
thanks, John,
j.

[V.R.S.C.]

Jacob,

I felt this poem! Thank you for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, V.R.S.C....
j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

There's nothing worse than being with someone and feeling all alone. A kiss that falls flat is just ... bad.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

been there enough times and certainly agree with you, Linda,
j.

[willweb]

You must remember this, a kiss is still a kiss when Saturn's in the sky. The weird poetic things of life...as time goes by. Some kisses send you soaring and some bring you back to earth long before you hoped to. Nice one my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, will,
j.

[FGFRANKLIN]

They say the rings of Saturn are cosmic rock and dust. They always made me think of a lady's fancy hat sitting sideways on her head. Sounds like a hot flash in the happening here like maybe a meteor exploding in the sky. I enjoyed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Fabian...
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I know this sensation so well. Your exaggeration brings it to life oddly enough, makes it real. Curious.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Winston,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Wow... when I had my surgery today...
it seemed as though I was lost in Space...
When I came back to reality, I felt as though
I had been to another Planet and was filled with energy.
Your poem reminds me of my out of body experience.
tenderly, Pat











































WOW...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I hope it went well, Pat,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

It was totally awesome... the Medical Staff were so Down to Earth, and it seemed like a New Birth... I was wide awake and the IV was inserted... as I drifted unaware while the Sculptor chipped away to Create a somewhat perfect Breast. Now I wait to discover if it has spread. It seems to me to be a Masterpiece where God was in Control. softly, Pat