I, in the sky

I, in the sky

fifty shades of black

deepening ebony star

the sheen of my shine

erin-cilberto

9/1/23

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

When the Sky is the darkest… the Ebony Star Sparkles… Venus vows are Prayers spoken…. dearly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Pat,
j.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Jacob, my friend,

A most mysteriously philosophical few lines that do seem but perfect in time's impact of perfect meaning ... I read this hours ago, and am still pondering upon each and every word ...

I don't know diddly s**t about form or style, never have, never will, never shall, simply because all that s**t is too far of technical for the human heart.

I read feelings upon page, nothing else of ever ...

Marve

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Marve,
j.

[Miss Sharon]

A beautiful and perfectly rendered senryu my friend! I love everything you write....always have. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Sharon,
j.

[ProphetsMother]

To me, this poem is an ode to the most high. Ohrmazd. God. I and I. They see all. If they were to come in human form I believe they would be endlessly black and beautiful. Thank you for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate these words, PM.
j.

[AMMD]

It’s so fun to watch inspiration born.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you AMMD,
j.

[AMMD]

You’re very welcome. Enjoy your weekend

[Fran Marie]

A lovely senryu nicely
rendered in both form
& content..I'm Lovin'
the fifty shades of brilliance here

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Fran Marie,
j.

[Light and ashes]

Beautiful, a favorite....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, my friend,
j.

[Light and ashes]

:) You are very welcome.

[Stella Armour]

just beautiful ...
a gorgeous senryu Jacob ...
love the image it portrays.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you kindly, Stella,
j.

[Shelley Warner]

Your line "fifty shades of black" makes me think about sitting in my Adirondack chair in the evening and watching the sky turn different shades and seeing the planet Venus.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Oh what a view that must be. Thank you, Shelley,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Pie in the sky - that’s where I went

This is hopelessly good J. Fifty shades of black.

You shine for so many and brilliantly so.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Chris,
j.