Cast those feelings aside

thanks to Soren for the inspiration for this one

Cast those feelings aside

 

I write poetry

as deep as

 

a puddle 

on concrete

that scarcely wets

the sole of a shoe

 

as it steps through life

gamboling with fate

afraid of

 

nothing

everything

time running out

splashing across a frame

of a movie

slashing the liquid compliance

of what we are

even when we are not

 

pools of serenity

as deep as

I write poetry.

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/3/23

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

pools of serenity
as deep as
I write poetry

Dear J, your poems are often as deep as the bluest ocean and I am a huge fan of your work.

I was drawn in by your title . Cast those feelings aside.

I have always worn my heart on my sleeve. Those loved and admired, stay so. Can’t help it. That’s where I drifted with your lines.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Chris,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

After the Rain… there is a Calm that Humming Birds will flutter around… where Puddles reflect Harmony. softly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, they do...thank you, Pat,
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

What a clever juxtaposition to write a deep poem about and wrap it around a shallow puddle.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Winston,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Just because it’s not a deep puddle, doesn’t mean you do
I’d not leave your mark on poetry….serenely you you touch many hearts….
Even though time is running out…..nice J.
Warmly, B.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome J.
Warmly, B

[Akinlolu]

This is coded. It isn't shallow as the opening line seems to imply.. Those poems may scarcely wet the sole of a shoe but they still left their mark. But what I found out is that a man who writes poetry as deep as a puddle has been engraving words of fire on hearts of flesh. They're words that burn deeply into the subconscious from time to time. A good write..
Akinlolu.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your kind words, Akinlolu,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Inspired and inspiring. Write deeply, freely and then walk boldly.
I like philosophical poems.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thanks Sami,
appreciate you.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome graciously