Wordslinger (a slow draw)

Wordslinger (a slow draw)

 

 

 

in the saloon

stands a half-filled mug

and a jammed typewriter

 

on the street

lies a man

with a lead-filled heart.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/14/23

Reviews

[FlatDaddy]

Wonderful stuff. I can't help but wonder what hot irony you must holster; I must hear those deadly action words you wield that pierce the heart so. But first, let me don my bullet proof brain; I prefer to live through that experience. I may not fall, but I will surely bow. Read on, Macduff.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

My dad always used to call me Macduff...nice reminder of him, thanks.
I like your metaphorical response to the poem.
j.

[FlatDaddy]

Thank you so much.

[Fran Marie]

High Noon & the heat is on, yet
the words are stubborn ..refusing
to cooperate.. perhaps another
round_up of beer.in cool mugs
.great metaphor laced within the lines ..

enjoyed this fine write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Fran Marie,
j.

[Fran Marie]

you're most welcome.🍁

[Desert Knave]

The imagery here is rich and funny. Very nicely done. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Jim...

[fallon]

Such great imagery here. With so few words you were able to paint such a scene.
Even the title says a great deal.
What a tragic end for the wordslinger. Unless, of corse, lead can still pump through his veins.
I loved reading this. Thank you!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, fallon, for your kind review.
j.

[Arundass TP]

The man is exhausted. His heart is whispering. for smooth take off. Good poem 😂

[jacob erin-cilberto]

better reply...I like what you wrote, thank you, Arundass.
j.

[FGFRANKLIN]

Well, a lead filled heart won't let the x-rays through. So we may never know if it was broken or not. But his jammed typewriter seems to be his end. At least he finished half his mug before the showdown. I enjoyed the read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

At least he did that, yes.
Thank you, Fabian.
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

With a Bullet-proof Breast... I might survive. Gun-slingers are Wise Guys who love swinging doors and breaking Hearts. Wild West and Boot-leggers. Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks for your lively response, I thought I had on my bullet proof vest...but Oops!

[MomzillaNC]

I can't say better than W. Barrett Munn below: "It requires heart to write; otherwise, when you open a vein nothing spills out."

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you so much, MomZ!

[MomzillaNC]

yvw, Jacob

[W. Barrett Munn]

It requires heart to write; otherwise, when you open a vein nothing spills out.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Winston...
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

When the words refuse to be typed, the poet is the bullseye! Drink a little more from that mug to break the logjam! Talk about great metaphors! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and hope the mug does not break...
thank you, Lydi
j.