night shift

night shift

 

rooms of tossing and turning

the sheets

spilled romance

into heartless passion

 

she stares at the ceiling

the clock

feels the sweat

pouring from his wallet

 

she picks up her purse

folds the green

as he lies spent

serene

 

for her another day passes

without connection

to what used to

feel.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/8/24

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

What is left after the fire has gone out only leaves a night of planning on the next day's shopping and a feeling of abandonment.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and shopping gets so monotonous.
thank you, andrew,
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

This sounds either like a lady of the night and one of her clients she is leaving as her shift is over or a girlfriend or wife that no longer feels or has a connection passionately or emotionally for the person she is with and feels numb after moments of sex that is simply a means to and end

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Either will do...thank you, P.B..

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome

[Papaya]

Very good write Jacob. That's a tough life and in that line of work it's all business. I've no doubt that time desensitizes you, so you go through the motions without feeling.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Sounds like the Godfather...."nothing personal, just business."
God, that is cold sex.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

A bittersweet love poem….the maid sees what she will always remember…her own passion with her lover…but no more…so her memories enhance when she sees this room , this bed full of recent sexual life…she takes the money and goes about her business…. This could be a scene in a movie…
I really enjoyed it!
Warmly, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome J.
Warmly, B

[Thomas W Case]

Powerful and poignant. Great write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Thomas,
j.

[Dave]

Except for the money, it is hard to believe there is no other satisfaction. I do not doubt that these women, for the most part, hate what they are doing. I can't help but wonder if there is no enjoyment at all.

Take care - Dave

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, one has to wonder,
thank you, Dave,
j.

[John the Baptist]

The oldest profession can provide a living, but the last lines speak of its possible emotional costs.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

So many, John...so many,
j.

[JD Major]

Like a classic foreign film of years ago, stark, black & white, life's flipside,
captured in your lines so well!
JD

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you JD...I quite like those old films.
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob… could this in any way… be a Paradox? Knocking on a Door? Softly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

quite possible Pat, quite possible.
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh the joys life of a hooker or call girl LOL

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes such a sad life...thank you, Dale,
j.