little house on Boot Hill

little house on Boot Hill

claustrophobic body

the casket has one room

no kitchen

and is too small for a TV set

I knew I would wake

my rent is paid up ahead

so I will lie here for eternity

thinking about putting on an addition

and getting a remote control

to turn my dead daydreaming

on and off

all the while adjusting the volume

of my conscience.

erin-cilberto

6/29/24

Reviews

[Thomas W Case]

Wouldn't that be wonderful to have a remote control for our brains? Great work.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

mine would probably lack batteries....
thanks, Thomas,
j.

[Philip Gaber]

I'm pretty sure Elon is working on a remote control for our brains. What would be outstanding is being able to play back specific memories from the past and load them up onto our TVs. Death is nicely encapsulated in this piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I would love to watch my old times in Vermont during the summers on TV....thanks, Philip.

[Philip Gaber]

I'm another New Englander. I'm from CT but have spent a lot of time in Vermont. It's a beautiful country.

[andrew mitchell]

Another fav of yours J, absolutely brilliant. Sometimes isolation or loneliness is a killer and if self isn’t stimulated that’s an old record playing in itself.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are quite insightful, my friend.
thank you,
j.

[Marie]

I love the comparison between a house and a coffin and the claustrophobia felt in this very humorously penned poem, dear J. All poets day dream and a lot of inspiration results. Love this witty write! Thank you for sharing, J and for the laugh too! Bless you always...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Marie.
j.

[Marie]

Most welcome always, J...

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I'd put in a boom box loud enough to wake the dead and have that cemetery rockin'! (laughing) This was a cute poke at death. Why should he be proud, after all?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Maybe some Led Zeppelin?
thank you, Fabian.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I'd be blasting some Stray Cats. I'm more blues and rock a billy. My favorite song by Led is "Hotdog" ;) But I caught the "Stairway to Heaven" reference.

[Betty Hermelee]

This is pretty witty, and i believe meant to be.... no one could live like this, even if the rent was paid up...nothing wrong with daydreaming, I do it all the time! "adjusting the volume of my conscience"
a great line...
Warmly, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, intended to bring a smile or chuckle...
Thank you, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome J🌷
Warmly, B

[Poetic Beauty]

I like be the somewhat morbid sense of humor. True a coffin is a bit of a confined space with no kitchen or tv just a bed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

And a hard bed at that. Definitely no Serta Mattress.

[Poetic Beauty]

Laughing definitely no serta with a soft pillow top

[Einstein Noodle]

little house ... on the prairie ... Boot HIll ... Wild Bill ... Calamity Jane .. South Dakota stomping grounds, Sir jacob! :) a soul screaming to get out .. wow! this hits me in the now
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, E.
How are you and Beau doing?

[Einstein Noodle]

we keep walking my friend! :) one step at a time .. love and peace
E.

[Soren]

Ah Jacob I have heard of low rent motels but this one is the lowest. I would worry most about a bathroom. A shower would be nicer now and then to keep the worms off. As to the volume on that conscience I would want to keep it on mute. The only thing more annoying than ads. I liked the lightness of this write Jacob it puts a bit of humor into a dark subject.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Soren...
j.