A Saturday Morning Rhyme

A Saturday Morning Rhyme

the skin starts sagging

the brain starts lagging

filtered life

of selective attention

with little or no retention

but love still touches my heart

even as we are forever apart.

erin-cilberto

4/28/25

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I filter my life through coffee grounds like T.S. Eliot's Prufrock. But it does make a bit jittery at times. We do hold onto memories. I enjoyed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

We are all jittery at times...too much Coffee? or too much poetry?

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Maybe too much poetry. There's no such thing as too much coffee until you can thread a running sewing machine. ;)

[Patricia]

this is touching and love the sagging and lagging and selective attention and retention, sad about the forever apart yet beautiful poetry, as always you wow me with your writes

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I get lucky sometimes.
Thank you, Patricia.

[Lydia Shutter]

No matter what the outer shell looks like, we are still the same people inside. If the love is real, it never dies. I liked the rhyming in this one. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Lydi.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

you speak well of aging… and everything begins to sag, except our love and our hearts, until the beating stops…….your description of vivid words makes this scene so upbeat….
nice!
Warmly, B🌷

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Betty.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Always a pleasure 🌷🌷
Warmly, B

[Lorry]

Those hearts do take a pounding, but for some reason do not burst when full, no matter how it feels that they do.
The rest of your words I recognise too Jacob...all too well! 😃

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your insights, Lorry.
j.

[Vol]

Jacob,
The thing I like about little poems is they sparkle like diamonds, double-refractive with unexpected flashes of color...
This one will get me through the day...
Vol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Appreciate you, Vol.
j.

[Ms claws]

That's beautiful, jacob erin-cilberto ...

Started off a little bit negative but the ending was awesome.

Thanks for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Eternity.
j.