into sunnier moments

into sunnier moments

 

visually stunning

you running

wind chasing you

carelessly caressing

your back

as your shoes

smack pavement

without a whispered sound

 

your resolve as silent

but smacking strength

he thought you needed

him to match your strides

but the incorrect assumption

has him at home 

running in place

 

while your future is a finish line

you will forever challenge

stride for stride.

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/2/25

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

The admiration the poet has for this woman comes through loud and clear. Problem is, he does not tell her how he feels. He is left to watch from the sidelines. Wind caressing her back....great image. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Lydi...She is strong and survives him.
j.

[DIVYA]

Its an exhilarating feeling to defy odds. Your words exude the warmth and appreciation you feel for her. As always, you touch and leave a lasting impact with your poetry. So good to be reading you, my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind thoughts, Divya,
j.

[John the Baptist]

It is hard to tell the speaker's relationship to the female who is the subject of this offering. Friendship seems to be the right answer, but it is clear the speaker admires and sympathizes with her. Apparently she has been restrained by a negative, possibly possessive relationship. Now, however, she has in some way broken free of all that and is hitting her full stride as an individual. The speaker envisions great things for her, and the rest of us must wish her the best of luck.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for the insightful review, John....you have a way of figuring out and philosophizing that makes much sense.
j.

[Soren]

Seasons pass, life passes, it is a race where the seasons are not needed and we race alone toward our own finishing line. The silence to me is our own personal world that others don't hear or see. This poem is rich in metaphor yet deceptively simple the key to all good poetry.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Soren,
j.

[Lara]

It's as if we're on our way to be where we already are.
This piece can be read with easy duplicity - (which I admire).
On first reading (when site was glitchy and i's in a rush) I had the impression of one person freely exercising agency and being gainfully proactive in the direction of their choices. And I barrack for that one.
Second reading delivers a dichotomy of self - and I break in the blood for them both.

Fine illustration, j. I like this!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your interpretations, Lara.
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

It took me most of my life to grasp neediness is the villain that creates the preponderance of our problems. It is only in the joining of separates that an entirely new story can be told.
Well done, Jacob.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I went through a lot of my life needing relationships to feel okay....but now? Just fine alone...Thank you, Winston.
j.