that cloud is poised above your lovely face

that cloud is poised above your lovely face

the blasphemous mountains

pivot between our hearts

a lonely Cessna's drone

parlays a message

Two lovers straining

to hear each other's 

echoes

the sound of whispering Redwoods

I can almost see you

within each sigh

the peaks so high

with nonchalance

at our resolute tears

that touch each other's cheek

those blasphemous mountains

I swear to myself

erin-cilberto

6/10/25

Reviews

[butterfly]

I love the redwoods and I loved this part of the poem: Two lovers straining to hear each other's echoes
the sound of whispering Redwoods. Thanks for another excellent and inspiring read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, butterfly.

[DIVYA]

"the blasphemous mountains
pivot between our hearts"

Loved the line...it made me think of something monumental, insulting true love. It made me think of egoes....we cry and swear, yet we are so helpless against it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Distance, much too much distance...thank you, Divya.
j.

[DIVYA]

.....welcome always, my friend.....

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Let's hope the plane doesn't crash land and get everyone hurt in the process. Very nicely crafted. I enjoyed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Fabian...hope all is well in your territory.
j.

[Mauricio Montoya]

I love the image but beauty is what the heart sees can never just that because its flesh but how it came together, love is what comes , its those craves that my love has no brakes.
Thank you for sharing

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your insight, Mauricio...
j.

[Mauricio Montoya]

There were typos, lol, beauty is what the heart sees but it could never be just that, from the flesh, when together love comes and those who crave it have no brakes to find it.
That's what meant. Thank you for sharing an Excellent write.

[Laz K.]

it is an exasperating notion that, in spite of the intensity of emotions, sometimes it just seems impossible to get through to another person. the mountain metaphor is very apt, and one feels for the struggle of the little Cessna.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think the Cessna is going to crash land.
Thank you, Laz,
j.