haiku #322 haiku#323

haiku #322  haiku #323

the damaged woods sing

a cardinal in the wind

tunes a raucous note

a vicious attack

clouds burst into angry tears

non-forgiving sky

Reviews

[Kady R.]

Wooww! These Haikus are so creative. You write so well. I love "clouds burst into angry tears" and "the damaged woods sing." I'm all about metaphors and these metaphors are so creatively written.

Love these haikus!! 🤗🤗🤗

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Kady. This is the only form I ever do...I tend to stick to blank verse...
And I tend to think in metaphors...Second poem I ever wrote was a metaphor...not a very good one, but looking back it was indication of my poetic leanings.
thanks for your words.
j.

[Kady R.]

Nooo waayy thinking in metaphors, soooo coool!!! 🤗🤗🤗welcome!!🤗🤗🤗

[Ayesha Faiz]

These are vivid and powerful. The image of the cardinal singing through damage is hauntingly beautiful, and the stormy sky feels intense and unforgiving—full of emotion and force.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Sad visually but also hard on the ear. The references to nature hurt. So much going on here j. Plenty to contemplate and feel.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks for hearing these, Chris...that was my main purpose...Sound.
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

Your juxtapositions are excellent, Jacob.
Made me picture many different meanings for each haiku. Well played.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for getting me, Winston.
j.

[Soren]

Two that tie together and complete the thought. A visual treat to the ear. Nicely done my friend

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Soren.
j.