a new order

a new order

 

we are under a "boil poetry" order

do not drink the words

directly from the tap of inspiration

 

there is sickness in the liquid lyrics

they are not safe to reflect

they are dangerous to the system

of human interpretation

 

stagnant retribution

from the words

tired of being digested

by inhuman eyes

the computer can see

but can it feel?

 

maybe we should start

purchasing bottled versification

maybe it will be purer.

 

erin-cilberto

6/26/25

Reviews

[Ms claws]

I get what the author is saying here.
AI has infiltrated everything it seems, with a sterile, unemotional bias.
A "boil poetry order" ...hmmm, a little bit amusing, a whole lot reasonable.
"Bottled versification" you should patent that!
Thanks, J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Eternity.
j.

[damienf]

Thought-provoking - I don't think you're making an intellectual point here (though you are). There's a rage. And it's not just about the hijack of poetry. Your choice of metaphor is an inversion of the expected in relation to art, and more a reflection of some relatively recent global issues underlying the anger - humans as somehow dirty things that spread infection. If I read that right, I'm on the same page - and love it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really like where you took this...Thanks for your insightful review, damien.
j

[Lorry]

Bottled verse is probably hoe things are going, but to me all I can think of is how we go from writing to all the great leaps of technology in artificial intelligence, yet we still get stuck in checkout with unexpected items that need human intervention to keep us all from reaching that boiling point of rage, when all we wanted was some bread and orange juice! 😃

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I would offer you some of mine...but the bread is moldy and orange juice has too much pulp.
I want more human intervention please, even if I have to pay double.

[Neha agrawal]

This is razor-sharp and refreshingly original.

[John the Baptist]

This one seems to speak of poetry written by AI, which would explain the reference to "inhuman eyes." Indeed, the computer cannot feel. I would like to try some of that bottled versification, though. Just to see how it compares with merlot.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

appreciate your response...I will take the water...don't drink wine.
j.

[Buddhistboy73]

Not sure I get the whole message of this poem, but I get the impression it has something to do with the march of technology and AI....

the computer can see but can it feel?...

A poem for the times ...:)

BB73

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Good impression...BB73....but then, whatever impression you got from it would sound good to this poet...as long as you got SOME impression and felt it a bit.
j.

[Poet]

The perils of A.I. poetry denotes trying to simulate interactions with humans and their intelligence without showing the robot behind the curtain. Poetry should be organic and not synthetic. It should come from the heart and mind and not from a machine.

Online social media didn't exist when Emily Dickenson, Ann Sexton or Robert Frost created their poems. Therefore the need for immediate attention and admiration probably wasn't what we see it as today. I'm sure they would have rejected the thought of any machine taking over their imaginations and experiences. I can only hope we're not heading into a dehumanized future.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I hope the same you do, Poet. And certainly Dickinson with her quill and Sexton with her confessional typewriter....wrote from imagination, heart and the guts of the words.
Thank you for your review,
j.

[Poet]

You're welcome. The same is happening with music. New bands that don't even exist in real life.

[Davidgeo]

There is a relatively new bacteria in the water that seems harmless. That I've been told is harmless. But I do not believe it is harmless. My lying eyes do not deceive me, or something like that.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I don't think they do deceive you...that bacteria is not human and it is infecting poetry.
thank you, David,
j.

[John the Baptist]

I think this one is a comment on the effect of AI on poetry. No, I don't think the computer can feel. We might learn something by watching "20'01: A Space Odyssey" again.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I couldn't stand that movie the first time....
maybe I am getting retribution for that from Hal...he has cursed me with A.I. replies to my work.
j.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow this is deep, fork pen watch what you write, it touch me I'm a simple writer but I love this site because one can learn to be better, I've been struggling with concept, but I also believe everyone is in title to write, but I do agree and enjoyed this read.
Thank you for sharing such an insightful write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really appreciate this review, Mauricio...
real writing is why I poem.....

[Mauricio Montoya]

My brother writing is a tough one because people read what they see never what you saw but it brings you up that someone decided to comment, now that's poetry and you are a poet. To say thank you for sharing how better way to be a writer in a world of poets.