Poetic Tensions

Poetic Tensions

 

 

 

allow me to allow you

to read deep into the bones

of my poetic tensions

a confession of sorts

a sharing of point of view

a straining to capsulate nature's effect

on the words

of my poetic tensions

a mind out of whack

since birth

pen in infantile hands

 

scribbling baby poems

then adolescent rage

then quarter-century heartbreak

then half-century reality

and then?

now filaments

fragments

of what remains

of my poetic tensions

and the lack of bone density

but still a few words

here and there

that might make some sense.

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/26/25

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

Maybe writing is like a sport where you have a time limit on how good you are, you peak and then slowly it’s downhill from there. I suppose it depends on how we exercise or stimulate the mind to carry on but there will be a time when all becomes a bit jittery and like driving a car , you lose your license in the end. We are binned with our very own selected poetry rejects we discarded, with our thoughts that ain’t what they use to be. Maybe old timers need a similar viagra tablet for poetry writing, now there’s a thought!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your thoughts drive better than this poem does...
You left me at the starting line...I am putting up the white flag, either one lap to go or surrender, I am not sure which.

[Kady R.]

Hiiiii J!!!

Thanks for sharing your poetry journey!! 🤗🤗🤗It was very insightful and so relatable.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Kady.
j.

[Kady R.]

Anytime🤗🤗🤗

[Lorry]

I expect your bones Jacob to be like that British tradition of seaside towns where each stick of "rock" has the name of the town printed throughout the treat.
We grew up going to Blackpool and the best part of it was going to the tower to see them making it and if you were lucky, tasting it hot from the ovens too.
I expect your bones would have Poet running through them in the same way, but would probably be less sugary because if they weren't you'd have had diabetes since you first picked up a pen! 😃

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thanks for your words, Lorry.
j.

[Desert Knave]

The line that sticks out to me most is " ... pen in infantile hands" , which I can totally relate to. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your comment, Jim.
j.

[John Sullivan]

Once again at the heights of your powers, J. I'm old enough to see my adolescent rage give way to the heartaches of middle-age, of which there are not few...

"fragments of what remains of my poetic tensions..."

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kintsugi

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Interesting link...thanks for that and your words on the poem, John.
j.