Density's Short Window

Density's Short Window

 

 

my poetic bones

speak in riddles of tendonitis

reckoning

aging calcium

cracking

dissolving

words

into an hourglass

mine is running out

 

granules of poems

grainy

but very real

fall on the page

through a tiny chute

made of fragile genius

 

that has been deteriorating

since birth.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/10/25

Reviews

[redzone]

I'm with Kelly, Jacob, you are "fragile genius". Your "granules" sparkle with meaning, and hell, wasn't it just yesterday you were born??!!!

Curt

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha yeah, 75 years ago, yesterday.
Thank you, Curt.
j.

[redzone]

WOW!! Congrats Jacob. The poetic scene, hell, the world is better for your 75 year old self!!! HAPPY BIRTHDAY JACOB!!

[Kelly Scheppers]

You, Jacob, are made of fragile genius. I am convinced of it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

You are very kind, Kelly...but I am simply a conduit for the words.
j.

[Lorry]

I feel this one Jacob.
Speaking as a not young enough to die young but not quite old enough to die of natural causes person who got injured yesterday by leaning on a table (I still have the elbow scar today!) I totally feel where this is coming from.
I always thought growing pains where a thing to describe youth to adulthood, but now I know for sure they are and should be called growing old pains.
I mean, how on earth can a draft from an open window cause an injury that feels like it needs reconstructive neck surgery?
Now if you'll excuse me I must go stare blankly at my not writing journal while tapping a pen against it before giving up and launching said pen through the air!
😃

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Grab that pen back and write a poem about what you just said in this reply....it's there, just temporarily a cut...that needs to bleed words.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

The poet is describing the fragile bones or the state of weaking his skeleton through many reasons; at least his morals and values make up his backbone.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Oh but they are a bit sore.
Thanks, Sami...I am getting old.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe. You are welcome sir Jacob

[Desert Knave]

I like it. I see the "density" getting less each time I have to run to the dictionary again, to make sure I know a word I thought I'd always known. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your words, Jim.
j.

[DIVYA]

I think its the reverse. The poetic bones only got stronger with each day. But how beautifully you created this metaphor. The bones have such a story of life to tell. This is called beyond awesome poetry!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

You are very kind, my friend...Thank you,
j.

[DIVYA]

You're welcome, always.