Flight

Flight 

 

 

misinterpretation of my poem

I never meant to mean what I meant

take back two of your readings

and give me a first impression

 

I find myself enamored with your visions

of words, phrases

and longing gazes

and want you to understand this poet

 

but 

I never meant to mean what I meant

and I will never write what I intend

if intending draws a third impression

 

of a poet with so much baggage

he is allowed just a small carry on

with room for a short haiku

light enough not to cause

 

what I never meant to mean what I meant

to cause the poem's rapid descent

into a crash landing

no matter how skilled the poet is

 

with his flying pen

parachuting into

a second impression

the reader ignored.

 

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/21/25

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

I think Francis Ford Coppola's Megalopolis was, not good... but I'm really glad he made it none the less. (i think you should be more unhinged with your writing Jacob)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think I am on my way, David.
j.

[Davidgeo]

When it happens, let me know... I think you would do better than Francis.

[Vol]

Jacob!
What a perfect capture of what it's like for a poet to stop in the middle to go get a warm-up for his coffee, and back, that stream of you know what, because being a poet... with greased bearings rolling along that train of you know what...
Loved it, man!
Vol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really appreciate your words, Vol.
insanity is poetry and my fingers go nuts on the keys or because of them.
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

But ... meaning what I meant has meaning.
visions of words ... phrases
and corrections draws the pen in tighter circles
as our flight spirals down
as the writer parachutes into that second
impression I ... the reader ...
can't ignore.

your writing captures the imagination
as the reader takes Flight.

Got me going old friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Ted, I appreciate all these years you have visited my writing and haven't tired of it.
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

Many more years to go for both of us ... with luck.

[Betty Hermelee]

Hi J... sometimes our first impression is not the last impression... just like not all people are alike or think alike... so maybe it's better to allow the third impression to be the last one..." never meant to mean what I meant".... so common these days!
Warmly, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thanks for the smile, Betty.
j.

[Chris]

Hi Jacob,

Such a common problem - wanting a new first (but really fourth) reader impression. Relevancy is always behind the eyes of the reader - we can always hope for a "blink".

[jacob erin-cilberto]

So true, my poet friend. Thanks, Chris.
j.

[Desert Knave]

The first real valuable critique I got about my poetry was from someone who felt I did not leave enough up to the reader ... that I simply "overtold" my story. Unfortunately words and phrases are often sloppy and ambiguous. Anyhow, an enjoyable read. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Sometimes we do overtell...and sometimes undertell.
Thank you for always being so supportive of my scribbles, Jim.
j.