The Breakup

The Breakup

 

 

I was the muse's lover

but she said I failed to satisfy

her.

the duration of my poems

too short

the rhythm of my poems

just lying stagnant

with quiet reserve

 

now I lie beside

my keyboard

with longing looks

tapping sighs

wanting just a small touch

of the letters

but poems are just exes now

 

the muse has moved on---

I thought "till death do us part"

but that is fairytale

my urgent fingers

hope for one last inspiration

 

that is reality.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/30/25

Reviews

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This may be my favorite poem of yours because i felt a little too related. And even if I didn’t feel related you would just make the reader in the story with your magnificent way of using words… “poems are just exes now” what?!? Incredible! What else i can say… and longing looks, tapping sighs… i can imagine you like that.
I am so jealous, i wish i was the one who wrote this poem…

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind words, Beren.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

I am smiling too at the humour in your lines dear j. A muse that can’t be satisfied lol. What an appetite she must have. You know muses come and muses go. Mine is flighty and fickle. Clears off, packs her bags without warning and takes extended holidays. We have an understanding, but a close friend - never. That’s where reality comes in handy. Thank you for the smile while my days are grey.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am glad I could bring you a smile, Chris...so glad.
j.

[Stella Armour]

Well as you know i am not always brilliant at reviews but this poem made me smile, and now i am still smiling at the images you created 😄😄😄

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I love your reviews and very much appreciate them.
Glad you got a smile from this.
j.

[redzone]

The metaphor of that first verse is more than fitting for your last line, "that is reality". When my ex came to me to sign the divorce paper, she said, "I thought we would be together forever," was a knockout blow, since it was she who wanted the divorce, had found someone else to love.

Muses can be fickle, especially poetry muses. We must always be on our best behavior.
-Curt

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, muses are fickle and so are exes.
thank you, Curt.
j.

[Ken Simm.]

I know all about this but could not couch it in such eloquent poetic terms.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind comment, Ken. So good to see you again.
j.

[K. Louis]

The imagery of creative longing and rejection is simple yet deeply relatable. I enjoyed reading this!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, K.
I appreciate your words. The most important to me is "relatable."
j.