Two Lovers, a footnote in History yet to come

Inspired by Cherrie's "Alluded"--

Two Lovers, a footnote in History yet to come

Under the delusion

you could love me

I alluded to a mythological notion

of us being on a rainbow

frolicking like Adam and Eve

on steroids, fig leaves be damned

and maybe us, as well

Under the allusion

Paradise was a perfection

of flowers and trees

birds and bees

the softest of touches

I could love you

some myths might be real

at least I am 

Under the delusion

this one could be.

erin-cilberto

2/9/26

Reviews

[Soren]

Passion strikes hard and creates wonderful illusions and dreams. A most romantic poem that at the same time is highly sensual, what siren has bitten you Jacob? Very nicely penned

[jacob erin-cilberto]

This was inspired by a poem by Cherrie..."Alluded"
I thank her for tihs one.
j.

[Soren]

You are always welcome my friend

[Lydia Shutter]

We hope against hope....compare relationships to the ones we assume are real on line. Could this be the one? Is this even real? So many questions. Lydi***

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, lydi...I appreciate you.
j.

[emmajoygreen]

Words like that make thoughts into beautiful dreams - shades of all colours, the 'all about' like a beautiful garden, perhaps.. ready for meandering, hand in hand. Laughing, joyful, without a care in the world. Beautiful thoughts create the finest poetry, Jacob.

'Under the allusion
Paradise was a perfection
of flowers and trees
birds and bees
the softest of touches
I could love you

some myths might be real
at least I am
Under the delusion
this one could be.'

There's short love story there, Jacob, one to remember, smiling.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, em.
j.

[emmajoygreen]

I know many of my reviews read of absolute blather but - face to face they just might make more sense. I really must cut back. Forgive, please.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I don't find your reviews blather at all, nothing to forgive, I appreciate them.
j.

[emmajoygreen]

Many thanks but know there is improvement to be had - was told that at school too at times!

Your words always display an need to share something precious with your readers - you especially do that when it comes to our planet and all it has and does. You hold life and the living as a gift from a special place, in a special way.

[Chris Shaw]

A beautiful poem of maybe wishful thinking. I very much like the references to the natural environment. Light hearted and lovely.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you so much for your words, Chris.
j.

[Desert Knave]

I like this, because in the end it remains hopeful (even if cynical in its tone). Anyhow, that's what I read. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your thoughts, Jim.
j.

[Curly Grace]

This poem carries a tender ache between longing and illusion.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Curly.
j.

[Michael Sun Bear]

From beginning to end, I find this the oddest, most refreshing love poem perhaps I have ever read. I don’t really know how to review it. I’ll just say, Well done my friend, well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate those kind words, Michael.
j.

[Rosie E C…]

This is affectionate and heart-warming.

Enlightening to read.

So welcoming…

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Rosie,
j.

[Cherrie-Bill]

I love it very fun and fresh voice. I say pick another word

I do that too have that I either want to use or love the sound of. It seems the very word sets the stage and mood.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thanks for the trigger of inspiration...I shot myself in the poem with it.