The Truth of Venus

For the Drops of Jupiter contest

The Truth of Venus

(Response Poem to Train's Drops of Jupiter song)

by Erin L George

 

I sailed across a happy sun
catching rays upon my tongue -
landing on the atmosphere,
the kind they often sing of.

 

I drank up the mango rays
and flirted with Shakesphere -
settling into cozmos,
the kind they write of.

 

He was too afraid to join
preferring the firmness of land -
keeping his feet on the ground,
where he's planted seed for years.

 

He eats deep-fried chicken
standing up for his best friend,
best man. Same girl,
the kind you dream about.

 

I ate of shooting stars
settling into cloudy haze -
sleeping with the moon,
in his warm embrace.

 

I waltzed with charmy wind
spinning with my arms outstretched -
flirting in the breeze,
with goose pimples.

He worries heaven is overrated
and I can tell him true!
I've been to heaven, back again
I plan, for sure, to go!

Reviews

[CinderBows]

Very nice connection the the song, (Drops of Jupiter is one of my favorites!) with your own unique twist. It puts a lovely image into the reader's head. Very good write!