If I fall asleep

Two sentence horror story.

I haven't slept for five days, because she warned me what would happen; A terrible fate awaits me if I do.

My eyes are closing on their own, and with every blink I see the demise that awaits me when Morfeus comes!

Author's Note

For a contest. Critics are welcome nonetheless

Reviews

[msharma]

Very well crafted. Good efforts made.

[Lale]

Weird, spooky, but fun. Nice work Esteban.
aand get some sleep haha.

[Nikita]

Okay so this was like really good ..

[emipoemi]

how about ".....when Morpheus *comes!" ending the story on a hard beat would allow for more eerie tingles. Well done otherwise.

[Esteban M.]

I'll take it.

[Samuel Dickens]

Well, I would give you an "A". With just two sentences, you send the reader's mind reeling. Who is "she"? Where has she gone? Won't she save me from this? And who/what is Morpheus? We hope the poor soul can find a way out.

[Esteban M.]

Thanks a lot for all your comments on my writing! I will continue reading yours, it is nice to find quality reading material, and yours definitely is.

P.D. Please do read and comment the rest of Petrus and Rufus when I upload it. I would appreciate your help!

[Samuel Dickens]

I will surely read it.

[Paul Bell]

Two lines of horror.
Like the scope, sleep depravity will kill you anyway, but Morfeus will do it quicker.