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I don't even know what this is.

You are locking up all of your secrets
You are locking up all of what’s passed
You are locking up all of the hopes you had
Which have fluttered away so fast

You are leaving behind all your loved ones
You are leaving behind all your cares
You are leaving behind all her torn-up flesh
That was rotten when you had fangs bared

You are trusting that we will not find you
And you’re trusting that we will not try
And you’re trusting that we won’t forgive you
But we all find it hard not to cry

Because you’re not the one that is hurting
And is rotting from the inside out
You are simply the one who has caused this
So we know not of why you now shout

But we’re breaking down what holds your secrets
And we’re tearing up what holds your past
And we’re tearing up all of the hopes you had
So your life – now in shambles – won’t last

Reviews

[Alexander]

This is really good. The flow is nice, and the rhyming doesn't sound forced. A nice, vague concept also, which is nice for the reader's imagination :) I like that you left the climax (or what I saw as the climax) un-rhymed--it draws attention to it, and doesn't seem out of place or anything. Good write.
Z