Looking

I look out my window

And I see the sun

I look at you

And see what you've done

I look out my door

And I see the rain

I look at you

And see my pain

I look in the mirror

And see my tears

I look at you

And see me worst fears

Reviews

[JustWantLove]

Very well perceived and put-together; simple, concise and poetic. Beautiful expression, composition and flow. A+

[Tara Ghorm]

I adore how you continually look back at the person and see some awful doom coming. Some people are like that... This has a lot of emotion in it ((as everyone else has already said)). It was a really fun piece to read!

[KenCarswell]

Well written! I love how you capture your emotion through this peice, I love it and cant wait to read more of your work!!

[Disturbed mind]

i don't know if i am right...but it seems that you're afraid of loose him? *not sure*
But...you did it again...good poem...

[Through the Gateway]

Wow. This is a little edgy. On one hand it speaks of a love lost, but on the other, there seems to be something more sinister at work.

"I look at you

And see what you've done"

Could be read soooo many different ways. Very good.

[deeps]

Such a emotional write here
I can snese hurt.
Very well expressed emotions.