Blind Eyes

Napo Poem # 1

Heads turn side to side

As they watched the word go by

Children scream

Chuch choirs sing

And people walk

The real world unseen

 

The world is based off of lies

illusions and deceptions

And everyone pretends

But no one really wants to see

The truth that lies beneath

Our articial world.

 

Everything's coming apart at its seams

and crumbling to dust beneath our feet

And all that was hidden

Is coming free

for all to see

But they'll still turn a blind eye

Because they just don't want to believe

They've taken this world apart

Piece by piece

 

Walking in the dark

The blind leading the blind

consumed by greed and corruption

Everyone sees

What's going to be

But no one care enough

to stop this worlds eruption....

Author's Note

Hey guys, guess what time it is! Its Napowrimo time! National Poetry Writing Month thats right!
So yeah if you haven't guessed I'm doing Napo this year...woooh! Oh and I know the poem needs some help (a lot actually) so tell me what you think can be done.

Reviews

[Drakana Wind]

I actually really like this poem. No, not actually; that sounds like it's a surprise that I would like your writing, when really it'd be a surprise that I didn't like your writing. I do really like this poem. The only help I can think to give you is technical stuff like punctuation and capitalization, so I guess, watch out for that.