Midnight Hour

What does the midnight Hour hold

The night held all its evils

Hidden in its shadows

Searching for a place to hide

The wind cried.

 

The stars shine in the sky

Their fears still light the night.

As far as they seem to be

They know corruption

Has a limitless reach.

 

Lightning bugs and moths

Fly quickly through the dark

With hopes to escape the demons

That flock the midnight hour...

 

The midnight hour

holds your heart

in a strangled hold.

Do not venture out young one

Or else expect not

To see the next rising sun.

 

Author's Note

umm i know something needs to be fixed but i can't tell what it is. Help?

Reviews

[Wingless Angel of Dream..]

I Like it a lot!!

[Drakana Wind]

Ooohh, I like this poem a lot. It kind of puts romance to darkness and evil, which is awesome. Your imagery and descriptiveness is great; it really adds to the concept of the poem. And I like the last stanza, where you made the poem personal, so it's not just telling a story, but also including the reader in this darkness. The only thing I see to be fixed is typos. Good job, I love it!

[EliLies]

I love this. It's beautiful, and very in-depth. Although, in my opinion, I feel like the line "The star shine in the sky" is a bit... awkward, I suppose. It may just be me being too rational, but, I don't know. Anyhow, this is great. Loved it :)

[Winter Poison]

I'd add a bit of formatting, like italicizing or underlining certain words to add emphasis and to make it look pretty. :3 But for the most part, it's good.

[Ohmy indies]

This is so beautiful and haunting! I really liked it.

"The midnight hour
holds your heart
in a strangled hold
Do not venture out young one
Or else expect not
To see the next rising sun."

Amazing! Great write.


-Ohmy indies :)

[Lexi Nicole]

Ooooh...Very haunting piece. I love it! I don't think anything in it needs to be fixed. I think it's fine the way it is. ^^

-Howl