Hypnotized; Mesmerized

Night fell

And he whispered to her

"Relax"

And they danced

Softly the music played

Skillfully they danced

She was hypnotized

Mesmerized

 

Her eyes glazed over

She dreamed

He smiled

His fangs gleamed

She was hypnotized

Mesmerized

 

His lips grazed

Her neck

Then he bit

Fangs sank slowly

Into her skin

 

Panic and shock

For a moment

Took over her faceAnd then

It was earsed

She was Hypnotized

Mesmerized

 

He pulled away

His blood lust satisfied

And finishing the dance

He walked away

 

Left her Hynotized

Mesmerized.....

Author's Note

I hate it. But i haven't written a vampire poem in a long time. Then Howl wrote a couple then Winter Poison wrote one and then i had to write one.... What you guy think?

Reviews

[Lexi Nicole]

I like it! It could have been a bit better, maybe a little more descriptive. But still, it's pretty good. ^^

-Howl

[Marlena]

me likey XD

[R. P. Coke]

This makes me feel hynotized. I think it flows very well, and captures the essance of that moment. A few spelling errors . . .
Took over her faceAnd then
It was earsed

Since you have pointed that out, I realized how many spelling errors I have in my poetry and I am working to fix them all. Thanks for the help.

This poem holds great promise and I look forward to reading more!

Keep it up.

[Lizanne]

Great!. Love the hypnotized and mesmerized!. You got it!