Angel Wings

He's my wings

He's gonna teach me how to fly

To rise above the ground

And lift gently

into the sky

 

He has given me hope

and a reason

He's given me joy

He's the reason why I live to see

Tomorrow

 

He's perfection

Beauty

Everything I want to be

And everything that I lack

in a way

I can't help but despise him

just a little bit

 

But with the sky so blue around me

and the brown and green dying earth

so far below me

and him holding my hand

As we escape all troubles thrown our way

I realize he's the only reason I can fly

 

He's my wings

And I hope that I can be

his angel.

 

 

Author's Note

....ok so i suck at grammar. I think there is osmething wrong here like plural agreement or something like that but i have no idea how to fix. Do we have any editors out there? Cause I would appreaciate it if someone can point out how to fix this.
With love forever and always,
Tallulah <3

Reviews

[SetApartGirl]

It was a good poem overall and definately better than I could do in the long run. But I don't know about anyone else but the two stanzas that said,
"He's perfection
Beauty
Everything I want to be
And everything that I lack
in a way
I can't help but despise him
just a little bit

BUu with the sky so blue around me
and the brown and green dying earth
so far below me
and him holding my hand
As we escape all troubles thrown our way
I realize he's the only reason I can fly"

seemed really awkward and out of place for me. But other than that, good.

[visions of doom]

you'll get plenty of advice in the grammar department gorgeous , don't worry about that , to me poetry should tell a story and bring a reaction , a smile , a tear ,maybe even a a warm feeling in the heart . if you can get that part right , the rest will fall into place for you as i hope it will for me . you have certainly got the story part right . delightful poem .

[Lexi Nicole]

I didn't notice anything with plural agreement, but I think we're equal in the grammar department so yeah. There are some typos in here though. Second stanza, fourth line "reasony". I don't think you meant to have a y there. Fourth stanza, first line you have the u in "But" capitalized. And in the fifth line of the fourth stanza, "trouble's" shouldn't have the apostrophe.

Away from the editting now....I love this piece