Happiness

Short poem bout loneliness going away cuz of love at first sight.

Happiness springs to my heart.

Death to loneliness.

Love is the raising sun in my heart.

Author's Note

im not good at editing.

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

cool

[Aldora Sparrow]

Short and sweet and I liked the colors to give this poem a little more character. Very nice. Just a few suggestions. "Love is the raising sun in my heart" I think "rising" is better than "raising". Also, in the same line, I think the sentence is a little awkward. I think "Love is like the rising sun in my heart" or "Love, like the rising sun, ___________in my heart" In that blank you can fill something in to give it a little more description. Otherwise, very nice idea and it's a great start. Keep it up!

[SugarlessGiRL]

sweet and short~ it's cute... love it!

[Prodigo]

**Love is the rising sun**, but what I found most interesting are the colors you chose for certain words, I.E. Love and Death, blue meaning peaceful or at least real and true. Death being somewhat velvet or maroon, meaning it should be exciting or exhilirating. I liked it.

[Cassandra D.]

this was sweet for such a short poem!
I loved it! :]

[Sseoni]

Cool poem! Great metaphors! I really liked this! Wonderful poem! Awesome colors! Such vivid colors! :D