the 5 sense's

I hear, not listen
I shout,not speak
I watch,not look
I touch,not feel
I sniff,not smell

by jessica freeman

Reviews

[Cassandra]

Aww. This is so .. deep and yet it's so short. I like all the line except for "I watch,not look" watching and looking are kind of the same thing. Since you were going for a contrast, perhaps it should read .. "I look, not see."
Other than that I liked the contradictions of the senses. I think for a beginning writer, you're doing well expressing yourself :)

[Bre]

that was so short and simple


i loved it lol