Alienated

Just a piece of work that has helped me to move on in writing it;to finally have some closure.

     So you say you're standing here with me. Your very presence raised me up. I thought I needed you to become who I knew I could be. Now, I'm seeing progressively as each day passes, the lines you have crossed, and the lines that are tearing us apart. They've transformed into a wall that I neglected to see. Countlesss days wasted; I regret not hiding myself from the lies and false promises as soon as you emerged from the darkness. The past, you carried with you. I scarcely moved by without absorbing the proliferation of the entity of lies consuming you; the dark that embraces you. No longer do you stand on my side of this life.

Author's Note

I'm sure there are some comma splices and other grammar errors. I am trying to review my English grammar book to improve my skills.

Reviews

[Stephen]

Some great mysteries`re hidden behind your deep aching words. Many thoughts`re still unclear with your words ... many things`re still striding to your heart to get find the meaning of .. ?? "L-O-V-E!!" Nice write!!

[Kristen Swan]

You're right about my thoughts being unclear. I like to make some of my poems hard to understand. I guess I'm still not ready to give too much away. This one is about love, but more about an old ex best friend.