A freaking lush called shampoo

If I would just let you stick to my hair

And bleach me with an anomaly

Would you still care to be my long-term friend?

The lather and suds are the faeces you excrete

Relaxing every now and then

You feel lighter and happier

But I don't frown while adorning myself with that froth of yours.

Just calculatively, when I am pivoting on my heels,

You hinge on my unvarnished shoulders like a matt

Craving your own passage like a slow avalanche.

From where did this avalanche start becoming slow?

I have distorted geography making it a bit empirical.

When I rinse the soapsuds,I see thousands of those tiny bubbles,

Crying out to cling to my arm 

And wrap themselves around

Exhibiting a cantankerous pole dance.

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

A creative fun write fattycbreezy52. Where did you get this name lol??

[fattycbreezy52]

i thought and thought.One thought led to another and the cycle went on,until my hand rested to type these five words.Hence,all the credit goes to the technique of "stream of consciousness";D

[andrew mitchell]

lol................................... breezy!!!!!!!!

[~]

A fun write, your ideas flow in ways nobody knows :D I have to ask. Yes to conditioner or no? ;)

[fattycbreezy52]

Yes to conditioner--always and forever;D

[wordman]

and i would still be your friend,yeah

[fattycbreezy52]

Hahaa a sure thing!;)

[wordman]

yeap!a sure thing

[B]

Love it
I am personally all about that shampoo
Very creative

Don't we all wish our partners secretly held on to our hair and body like that perfect lather .........
I know i do

[fattycbreezy52]

You echo every girl's innate desire. Thanks Nisreena:);)

[B]

lol yup yup yup

[Misery]

The many inspirations of a beautiful mind. A squeaky clean creation, dear Fatty.

[fattycbreezy52]

Wowww and a very rich, encouraging comment from you Kevin:)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This expresses anger and disappointment with a partner in a hair raising metaphor which leaves the reader washed out lol. Full of emotion but some 'mixing' of metaphors.

[fattycbreezy52]

You identify my purpose very well John.Goof bless you and your power of critiquing.
Thanks a lot; )

[fattycbreezy52]

You identify my purpose very well John.God bless you and your power of critiquing.
Thanks a lot; )