Trust

T ime spent build bond, beautiful and strong
R elationships, warm, alive and endless,
U nited, untamed, untouchable, until
S elfish ambitions if not handle with care
T orn trust, precious, priceless and dead, into pieces

Reviews

[Ken e Bujold]

lovely poem Olita. Carefully constructed and right on point.

If i could make one small critique though. With a title like Trust, you should really consider trusting your readers to pick up on the acrostic construction of each line being part of the puzzle. Rather than separating the intial letter from its rightful place at the front of its word, attach them. Trust your readers, you'll see them are very astute readers who will catch your clever design, and love you all the more for trusting them to find it.

Just my thought.

Love the work
and thanks for the friend invite.

Ken

[Kingdom Gurl]

Thanks for your important crtique i welcome it and the impor3 message to trust the readers very important feedback, I honestly have no idea of acrostic, does exist

[Kingdom Gurl]

Welcome these feedback as it will make me a better writer!

[Arundass TP]

This is a beautiful poem with staring characters reading trust and describing. Good work 👍

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really nice acrostic here...and the last line, so powerful.
But I do agree with Ken...readers will pick up on it...a little too "in your face" with the capitals separated like this.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

wow .. powerful .. has a depth of empathy and knowledge only gained by experiencing life .. where would we be if not for trust .. nice piece Olita .. in my opinion
E.

[John the Baptist]

A nice acrostic piece here. Indeed, trust is wonderful, but it is also fragile.