i am lost in this place i dwell

A dark lament

where art thou my love?

my spirit weighs heavily where i lie

and the darkness is a cloak that hides me

from this place

 

where am i my love?

waiting in a pit so dark and deep

where time sleeps in the arms of infinity

 

i am but flesh rotting from the bone

 

dost thou hear me, my love?

can thou feel me in thy dreams?

i cannot find the place 

i am to go

 

above me a raven cries

i am drawn to dwell within his mind

seeking out any place thou may be

 

does thou weep for me, my love?

i am clouds sweeping across an endless night

your name resting upon my fleshless lips

 

but i am lost in this place i dwell

so very lost in this place i dwell

Reviews

[bob, small b. aka invs]

i liked this, but have a little problem with the archaic language not being consistent. for instance, "where are thee" should probably be "where art thou" and "does thou" would be better "dost thou". sorry if this sounds picky, but i've read a lot of shakespeare and the king james version of the bible and this just didn't sound right to me. i like the poe-esque feeling of the language and subject matter.

[felioness]

Editing is always very much appreciated by me. I shall correct. Thanks for taking the time to read and assist!

[Sami Khalil]

I'm the clouds sweeping across an endless night... Well penned.

[felioness]

thank you for reading my work. I promise i will reciprocate!

[Sami Khalil]

You are quite welcome...