Huginn and Muninn (Thought and Memory)

Huginn and Muninn, (thought and memory) Odin's Raven's of Norse Mythology

two ravens

spoke in tongues
sibilant sounds crossing rivers of ice
undercurrents of memory
utterances

and half remembered lullabies
whispered
 beneath blackened skies
when sun was lost

my voice fell forfeit to the stinging winds
infecting forgotten places of forold
burrowing in amongst the misbegotten cold
of unacknowledged sins

... disavowing dread

your mother's voice (they said)
warned against such false pride
you devour  experiences  like a
starving wolf

forever bold
instead

i drifted across frozen landscapes
laid waste by ignorance
more ripe than foetid flesh
living off the dead

said the ravens of my soul
(swallowing it whole)
as corvidae are prone to do:

you should listen when the old crone speaks
ancestral wisdoms arm the weak

 

 

Reviews

[illie pete]

I just read it and I love the way you did this piece of writing! It's very vivid and the way you put the words makes it flow very nicely. Good job.

[felioness]

Thank you for your kind words and for taking the time to read my work. Very appreciated.

[DaughterNature]

This is really something special. I love the imagery, but more than that I love the way you wove in the myth and the mythical creatures! The rhyme and rhythm moved well for my ear. The one thing I will say is that I tend to prefer punctuation - it helps break up phrases so that what's written is easier to understand.

[felioness]

Thank you for reading this piece and for your words of encouragement.

[John Ryan]

very juicy and vivid images

[Delmar Cooper]

The words sound good, even when they aren't necessary for the poem. So let me consider it a song which needs only sound to complete itself.

[felioness]

Thank you for the read and encouraging words. I think I understand why E.E. Cummings wrote the way he did...firstly it is just plain easier than messing around with capitalization, punctuation and such but more importantly, I don't want to direct the reader. I want them to go where they will. I discovered that when you write and offer your writing to the world it is no longer "yours". Once read, your words will be interpreted in ways you could not even imagine but they will have have made it "their own" and I find that a very beautiful thing!

[MomzillaNC]

Vivid and intriguing imagery. I found you in the Promote Me! XI (Poetry), which I too have entered. Why haven't I seen you before. See, now this is a good application of E.E.Cummings' style. Well done.

[MomzillaNC]

Congratulations on placing in the competition

[jjwilbourne]

This is very visual. I love the images you used. They were all very appropriate to the theme

[felioness]

Thank you! I am honoured by your words! I appreciate you taking the the time to read my work.

[C. Rose]

Congratulations!
This piece is a finalist in Promote Me! XI.
By 1/31/2015 you can vote for this piece here: http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Promote-Me%21-XI-%28Poetry%29/50813/

[felioness]

Thrilled to be a finalist!!!

[Adam Whitworth]

That's very good, well done. I'm checking out some of your other writing now...

[Sami Khalil]

"i drifted across frozen landscapes
laid waste by ignorance
riper than foetid flesh
living off the dead"

This was splendidly written and marvelously conveyed...Thank you for sharing...:)..............

[felioness]

Thank you for all your reads and encouraging comments!

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:).................